tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4152495742335213181.post2748614611794430373..comments2015-02-19T14:39:00.825-08:00Comments on The First Five Pages: SEAL WARRIOR by J. Terry RieblingAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03231167616332045313noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4152495742335213181.post-32063609007350856312012-04-11T09:54:53.000-07:002012-04-11T09:54:53.000-07:00I didn't get the chance to read it all, but he...I didn't get the chance to read it all, but here are somed edits I found: <br><br>Prepositional Phrase Comma: In the decade following WWII, the attention...<br><br>spelling: fire bases = firebases?<br><br>new paragraph needed at "Commanding officer Colonel Christian..."<br><br>spelling (hyphen): well defined = well-defined ?<br><br>spelling: fifth paragraph "geurilla" = "guerilla" (also in para. 10)<br>and also fifth paragraph "vocubulary" = "vocabulary"<br><br>Punctuation: End of the fifth paragraph should be a period, not a semi-colon.<br><br>Spelling: 7th paragraph "Seal's" = "SEALS" (x2) and also in paragraph 11.<br><br>It starts in third person, but switches to first person in paragraph nine.<br><br>Verb Tense Agreement: Para. 11 "one of the few men who is..." = "one of the few men who are..."<br><br>Paragraph 11 doesn't make much sense to me...perhaps I am reading it wrong.<br><br>Hope I was helpful! :)BipolarGirl1984noreply@blogger.com